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Written by Lee, on 01-03-2010 01:23
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I watched you age from a distance, your skin

start to sag from your body, the creases

drawing lines on your forehead where heartache

was a timeline and nothing now but a visible memory.

Mine are starting to form but my eyes still show

a sadness that can only be defeated by time.

I watched your bones take shape and jut out

as sharp edged tables are hazards to children

and innocence, yours embrace the danger

of becoming child proof and censored.

I fall, but my bruises still tell a sad story

while yours turn brown, yellow, then heal.





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Posted by Thunder, on 08-03-2010 11:54, IP 72.240.127.93, Registered
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I read this and right now I am thinking of my current life path. I am at a point in my relationship where I want the plastic surgery and my face to lift and not show the signs of how tired I actually have become. The "sharp edged tables that are hazards to children" is the barrier I have built around myself to protect myself. I push him hard to inflict the pain and cause the bruises that are deep and will show for an eternity and he pushes back just as hard, but I am quicker to heal. 
 
The visuals that you have in here are so pain stakening point on that it isn't funny. Amazing now this was the first poem I read.......... 
 
calluses on my feet ......... appropriate after reading how the person has to toughen up to keep going. 
 
 
Been quite some time since I have read something and I believe this shows your ability at writing.
 
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